some interesting sfx and wide, slightly detuned pads to start. lot of movement without any of it being obvious. melody starts around 0:26, with some interesting retriggering going on. it feels very loud. everything comes in around 0:52, and the whole thing sounds slammed against the limiter (visually that's clear too). it's an aspect of the style i'm not as into personally but i understand where this is going, and all of the parts are pretty clear and able to be heard despite the waveform malformation. it sounds like it's the same thing repeated twice here - the second half of the melody at 1:12 doesn't sound different from the first.

there's a nice break around 1:46 for a bit - i would have loved to hear a bit more exploration here, actually, just because the melody's so repetitive - and then 2:12 is copy/pasta from 0:52, again repeated twice with a transitional element coming out of it. the outro brings back some of the intro's sfx, and noodles through the melody line one more time, before landing on a single note to finish it off.

i like the idea and i actually think you've done a really nice job of the style, all told. it's just too repetitive. if it'd ended at 2:12 on a single note, i'd probably comment on the repetition and be ok with it, but a 32s section is repeated three times in all. that's close to half the song. it's just too much.

add something to help differentiate between the repeated sections - some countermelody, a slightly altered bassline, a different beat - and i'd be down. as it is, even with this genre being what it is, this is too repetitive.

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