This is definitely an improvement over the previous submission, but I have to agree with proph here that there's still a lack of personalization to the arrangement in the presentation, as well as two other key issues - one with the programming, and one with the mix. I've been asked to give some tips on the guitar first so we'll start with the mix and how the guitar is related.

When I sum the track to mono, the rhythm guitars vanish! You have hard-panned your rhythms to open up space in the middle, which is good! But you have either duplicated your rhythm guitar track and polarity-inverted it, which causes phase cancellation, or you tracked the same rhythm guitar tone twice and they line up in a perfect way to phase cancel each other. There's too much math to explain, so here's a guide; essentially if you sum your track to mono and can see the meters moving but you hear nothing, you have phase cancellation. I'm not going to pretend that you have another guitar laying around (although that would help solve the problem!), instead I recommend:

• create an entirely different amp-cab signal for the second rhythm guitar
  • that means any of the following, ideally multiple: different guitar, different amp head, different cabinet, different mic(s), different mic placement, different EQ

It's good to double-track your rhythms! Just make sure you track with different (ideally complementary) tones so that you don't lose the entire stereo guitar pair when summing to mono.

The other main issue I have is the programming on the drums. proph noted the snare having the same velocity throughout - I am hearing the same velocities on all the parts of the kit, especially the hats and kick and snare. Part of making a remix your own is the time spent on dialing in these kinds of details - a drum groove is not just the placement of the notes, it's also the dynamics of those notes! You can largely level out the volume of the drumkit with compression on the shells and cymbals, but you still want to have dynamics in the form of velocity changes on the notes before that. It also sounds like you're missing something for the section :37 - :52; either a cymbal didn't render or this is a jungle tom groove and the toms are missing.

Overall this is a really good demonstration of your progress! It's not ready for the site, but take this feedback and keep improving - we'll see you pass the panel in the future! :D

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